What The Hell Have I Written? by Roberto Santos

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Author:	Roberto Santos
ASL Info:	18/Male/India
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 118/159/75
Words:	100

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	868
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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I wrote this half-asleep one night, and later I couldn't figure out what I was trying to convey at the time. Anyone venturing a guess?

What The Hell Have I Written? dots

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The first time - or the last?
I am yet to decide
Are you the one meant for me?
Meant to be by my side.

Is this what heaven must feel like
After at least a while?
Or is it just a mad fantasy
My mind just can't reconcile?

So many questions - yet so few answers
Abound in my mind
Unless these issues are resolved
No peace will I find.

Awake - for there can be no salvation
We have been doomed from the first
No one shall give us water
Although we die from thirst.

Submitted on 2006-05-22 03:08:23 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hmm. I don't have a clue what was going through your mind, but I do like the poem regardless. It flows very well, and the rhyming does not seemed forced. That is a hard task to accomplish. At first it sounds like you could be talking about love, and Heaven being with the person whom you love. But then you find out that it all was just a fantasy, and you become disappointed. I don't understand how th end could really fit in with my theory, and I am probably completely wrong, but hey, I tried. :D Good luck on figuring everything out.
LeAnna
| Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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