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    dots Submission Name: Misty Morning Revelationdots
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    Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
    ASL Info:    18/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122/151/29
    Words: 389
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this for my English class during our Romanticism unit. There had to be a regular rhyme scheme, between 9 and 12 syllables per line, at least 25 lines with stanzas of either 4 or 6 lines. And the poem had to focus on one aspect of nature.



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    dotsMisty Morning Revelationdots
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    The sun is rising from her boundless bed,
    The backs of my eyelids are burning red.
    Drops of fragmented light swim through the blind.
    Welcoming it, morning wakens my mind.

    Carelessly floating on the crest of a dream,
    Dancing the line between real and make-believe.
    Early morning, slowly I open my eyes,
    In the night the air materialized.

    Thrust open the blinds, let the fog encompass me,
    Let the dense chasm embrace me, let it free me.
    Quickly silence my head and heighten my senses
    As more and more of this heavy air condenses,

    Leaving drops of dew on evíry flower,
    Smelling like an approaching shower.
    Affable birds chirping heavenly tunes,
    A viscous fog cleverly hides the moon.

    A sense of peace lingering in the air,
    I canít help but feel it everywhere.
    Itís in the veiled rising of the morning star,
    And in the song of a bluebird traveled far.

    This morning is like a painterís canvas,
    Filled with possibilities and purpose.
    With every stroke of its fateful brush,
    It fills my heart with an aesthetic rush.

    Iíve witnessed the majesty of a pearl,
    Sitting here, watching the morning unfurl.
    Itís done something it did not intend:
    Iíve realized I never want it to end.




    Submitted on 2006-05-22 09:16:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's really beautiful. I love looking out the window early in the morning, it's something that even a picture can't really capture. Seeing everything in that sort of new light is an experience I think everyone should have, if only to realise the importance of taking a moment for something special, something that you may never see anagin. You captured that very well, it's lovely.

    --MagPi
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, i felt like i was on my back deck sipping juice and watching the sunrise. Your descritive terms are awesome.

    Thrust open the blinds, let the fog encompass me,
    Let the dense chasm embrace me, let it free me

    Those 2 lines stood out the most to me. Why? Probally cause i had a picture of someone pushing away something bad and bringing in something good. Or I horribly wrong?

    Anyway, Great Job!
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Phobos | [ Reply to This ]
      First off this is going right to my favorites. Finally it was peaceful, it was... it was wonderful. Your school must be very good.
    It gave me a sense of calm, I mean right before I read this I was in a bad mood, I am telling you, it calmed me and things are not so stressed. Thanks kido.
    The only thing is I might have used "had materialized", but either way it works great bravo kid. If you keep this up there is no telling who will honor you for your work.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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