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    dots Submission Name: I Loved youdots

    Author: night_angel
    ASL Info:    22/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 188/242/100
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1276
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 502


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    dotsI Loved youdots

    I've been hiding my pain
    While searching in vain
    For a way to show you
    I Loved you

    I've been lying in wait
    And now I berate
    Myself for not just saying
    I Love you

    I've lost the light
    That helped me at night
    Because I thought you knew
    I Loved you

    Now I'm lonely and sad,
    But that's just too bad...
    I should've made sure you knew
    I Loved you

    Submitted on 2006-05-22 10:37:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      fresh pains from old memories, this is why i always told you you were one of the greatest writers
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      This was sad. I liked it...but..if it isn't too terribly late, I think you should still let the person know that you love them.

    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      short sweet and to the point. I liked this. The only advise is for the last stanza, the lines

    Now I'm lonely and sad
    But aint that just to bad...
    don't do the last lines justise..
    I don't like the aint and the sad, bad rhyme
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      Im guessing this is about a brake up?. I really like this piece, i can relate to it alot. I can feel a sense of loss, which almost made me cried. Remarkable if you ask me for being a short poem. I really enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by xaos | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish I couldn't relate to that.
    The relationship I had with the only person I really loved was flushed down the tiolet because he didn't know I loved him. But hey, what can you do?

    I really love the way you wrote this. It made me all teary. And the repetition of "I Loved you" made it a thousand times more sad.
    The emotion you put into it shows through every word.

    You have a lot of talent.

    See? At least terrible things inspire wonderful poetry.

    Great job
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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