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    dots Submission Name: Confusiondots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 871
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just writing about anything that comes to mind. Maybe I'm crazy.


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    dotsConfusiondots
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    I don't have much to say,
    Because I am not happy and I am not sad.

    Do I care at all?

    Why am I writing this?

    I don't understand any of these feelings.
    They are new to me, and vica versa.

    Everything is running into me.
    My life is like a hit and run,
    With confusion as the driver.

    I'm all alone,
    And splattered on the road.

    Why do I bleed?

    What am I bleeding?

    This is not who I am.
    I should be able to comprehend the situation,
    But I can't.
    I think I'm bleeding my ability to cope with life.
    It is not like normal blood.

    I can't move neither leg nor arm.

    Does this mean I'm paralyzed?

    Everything happened so fast.
    I never saw it coming,
    When I should have.

    Well...
    That's all I to say.
    Please tell others my story,
    Maybe they will be able to help me,

    Because the situation has gone too far.

    I'm all alone...
    Bleeding...
    And talking to myself.





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      Over all it was good, just make sure to proofread and edit. I felt that there was a good flow to it although it did seem to skip around a little in the beginning.
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Ganesa | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, writing from your head makes for awesome pieces (I know..) As for seeming crazy, don't worry, I do it all the time and you should hear the insanity that comes from my head. You sounds like...a normal teenager really. Not fitting into a world where adults rule yet, not fitting into the child world. So..you get stuck, no place to go, no way to know how to feel...and the depression sinks in. That cold, long depression of emptiness and just...it. I can't explain "it" but you know it when you feel it. My advice..don't worry about it, I've been there (still getting through it) and done that. Life is too short to really care.

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      No offense, but I didn't like this. I know this was done on purpose, but it was too scatterbrained for me.


    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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