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    dots Submission Name: beautiful in my minddots

    Author: nomad knight
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 110/75/41
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       the last of the trio consisting also of "our story" and "my love". I hope to give this and those others to a girl before graduation as a good bye. They don't go exactly with eachother and that is my intention. Any comments, feed back, or suggestions you may have i will be happy to hear.

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    dotsbeautiful in my minddots

    You will remain beautiful in my mind
    Iím certain Iíll have it no other way
    In my heart, your face one will always find
    Protected inside past my dying day
    You skin like untouched freshly fallen snow
    Your hair like wind swept grass on hills of gold
    Voice soothing like a wild water flow
    Words warm like a fire warding off the cold
    You were one of the closest friends Iíve had
    As that I shall remember you the best
    You being there for me when times were bad
    A lighthouse guiding me in the tempest
    And though you were not perfect I confess
    I tell you that now; I could not care less

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      "And though you were not perfect I confess
    I tell you that now; I could not care less"

    This has a perfect rhyme and I would love to quote it. You did a wonderful job with the whole thing but I felt like something was amiss. I'm crazy for love poems so this was a treat.
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]
      :*) .....wowowow.......this was so beautiful and the imagery was amazing....
    so much pure unconditional love i felt as i read this and one that will last infinate
    i really love this .......it made me sigh and took me to that special place we have in our hearts with the one we adore
    i loved loved it yeahhhh
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Most of the time, poetry as an agent of intellect needs to be dressed elaborately to convey a meaning effectively. But there are cases, for the emotional benefit (and not just the comfort) of the writer, when it needs to be as simple as an "I love you" shot in the air.

    This is one of those cases.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is very beautiful. I'm glad that you are giving this to your friend and i believe that she would appreciate it. Seeing that you two were such good friends, i want to urge you to not let this be a good bye forever. Maintain this friendship. A friendship like that should not be left to dissolve.
    The peom itself was filled with beautiful imagery. The comparison of her features with nature was craftily married. I think it was well written. Keep up the good work. Congrats on your graduation and all the best to you :-)
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by lilyfleur | [ Reply to This ]
      this is soo sweet I wish a boy would give me this. You know what I think, I think that in its essence this was a beautiful poem and it is perfect just the way it is and you shouldnt change anything because this came from the heart so it should be perserved that way. Its wonderful to see that there are still those kinds of friendships where you would give anything to see that person smile, and you would say anything to comfort that person the way they comfort you when you need a shoulder and a hand to hold. I know how difficult goodbye's can be but I hope that you and your friend will always keep in touch and continue to have that wonderful friendship in your adult life

    good luck with everything
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]

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