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blood ties

Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79 /119 /44
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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its sad i know i'm really just venting

blood ties

blood ties us to them
the live to the dead
we now we cant escape
whats flowing through are veins

blood ties me to them
the past the present
i know i cant escape
memories pulsing through my veins

i want to cut them out of me
my parents and my friends
but they infeced me in heart
deep within soul
no matter how the blood flows from me
i'll never be alone

Submitted on 2006-05-22 16:55:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i feel what u are sayying here.You wanna let go of everyone and not feel them but its hard cuz they flow in ur vains

the first stanza is kinda confusing but this poem is good.

Queen Darkness of the Grim Draco
| Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]

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