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    dots Submission Name: Mother's Daydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       For Mom's Day I traced my 34-yr old hand and wrote this poem around it and drew some kool pictures inside the hand...my mother & I didn't get on very well for awhile & she "doesn't understand" where my poems & drawings "come from" and "insanity" is her favorite word but she's a strong woman & survived finding my brother shot and I'm realizing how important she is...so this was hard to write but and may be goofy but it was very heartfelt 4 me. Thanks! Love, Peace, Joy!!!

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    dotsMother's Daydots

    My hand may seem so much bigger than when I was
    I know from being a mother myself for children's growth we're torn.
    For our prints only change in size
    not the dreams God helps us realize.
    Our hands we've held together in Love,
    the same hands given of each a shove...
    Together, apart
    our hands always reaching,
    Life, death
    our family learning, teaching,,,
    I've got 2 Hand
    2 U;
    You're the mother and
    me true...
    So here's a special
    pat on the back,
    you gave me everything
    and for nothing I lack...

    Submitted on 2004-05-11 17:52:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      shyt, if i tried giving this to my mom, she'd just [censored] and complain about me never writing anything that's "happy". I hope your mother didn't do that to you. this was well done, and pleasantly different from most of your other writes. This could benefit from a slight restructuralization, but holds the meaning never the less. nicely done.
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      a real sweet poem for a mom, ive always wanted to make one too but the words seem to hide themselves from me, but hey this poem of yours have said it all for me <though some parts does not apply to me>,.. hhhhhmmmmm, how great mothers really are!!!! never ending Applause for them
    | Posted on 2004-05-18 00:00:00 | by zadhoevlhu13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this is a gorgous tribute! Did you show it to her? I'd recommend breaking up the first two lines as they are difficult to hold when the rest of the poem is so short
    Well done!
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      KICK ASS!!!!
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Deep Ace Thinks | [ Reply to This ]

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