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    dots Submission Name: Giving it updots
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    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 771
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1433



    Description:
       Some lyrics I've been running through my head lately and finally decided to write them down. Basically it's about giving up something you enjoy to make a better life for yourself and those around you. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsGiving it updots
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    Sometimes in this life
    sacrifices must be made
    When the fabric of your dreams
    is starting to get frayed

    You must find a higher place
    starting from within
    It is the only way
    you have a chance to win

    The path you've chosen now
    is leading to dead ends
    Look inside yourself
    and start to make amends

    Giving it up, Giving it up
    The choice is yours to make
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    It's the course that you must take
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    Decisions daily made
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    Soon the pain wil start to fade

    The reasons for the change
    are your's and your's alone
    When it's all over
    the benefits they will be shown

    All of those touched by you
    all along the way
    will have their eyes wide open
    to see your "light of day"

    The path you've chosen now
    is free of stones and brush
    The inner self you've grown
    is beautiful and lush

    Giving it up, Giving it up
    To reach a peaceful end
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    To make yourself your friend
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    The battle's finally won
    Giving it up, Giving it up
    You'll see your rising sun




    Submitted on 2006-05-22 20:52:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      to give something up
    its so hard
    u rote it like its easy...



    Queen Darknesss of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      the last lines say the battle is one? I don't know if giving it up should result in winning the battle...This will be interesing to hear with the song..
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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