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i am free at last i will scream it as i pass i am done with it all free to breath i can move and see everything around me at last i am free now you will see who i really am you have scorned me you ignored me now i can see how badly you treated me i forgive you i am moving on you cant hurt me anymore |
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| this to me is like a cry of release, of that final moment when you have escaped/been released from the prison/confines of whatever situation it was you were most unhappy in. it could be a drug, it could be a bad relationship, it could be a bad job, it could be bad seafood, it could be simply harmful emotions, but whatever it is you are free and screaming it out to the world which i find beautiful, the first stanzas don't exactly meld into one another but they work together, to bring a point across to the reader/one this was written to. i think it works like it is, but thats just me. thanks for sharing!!!! Meow!!! | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ] | I really do like the meaning, I was really depressed and suicidal and I've overcome it and it's been so nice to have moved on. This is an awesome peice, the last stanza though, doesn't really mesh with the first. I think it would be good if you made the first one more rythmy (apparently it's a word now |  ) it would really make the peice more poignant. It's very original and definitly full of your voice. way to go! ~sacred_tears dani | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ] | I love the message here and the tone of new found strength. There is a sense of empowerment in your words. Take a fresh breath and enjoy the freedom and simple ignore those who would stifle you. | jan | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ] | |
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