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    dots Submission Name: The Magnumdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this is true...I actually heard a comedian say something similar to this recently and reminded me of the situation that had happened to me a few years ago---I really did jump out the window!
    1st floor though!


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    dotsThe Magnumdots
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    She said, “here put this on”
    And she handed me a rubber.
    A Magnum Rubber
    And I asked, “what is this?”
    She replied, “what is that too small?”
    I said “No, I ahhhh…well where did …I mean
    why do you have these?”
    To which she responded “a girl can never be too safe”
    I said “yeah, but”…then she said, "and it’s the last one”
    I sat there thinking with the magnum around my finger....it looked like a mitten.
    I wasn’t sure what to do, but I have been dating this girl for a month now, and this wasn’t the first time I had slept over, nor we had sex.
    But was the first time I have seen these Magnums, and why was the box empty? What basketball team is she sleeping with?
    So, what would Superman do in this situation?
    So, I jumped into the Magnum, because it looked like rain, and I flew out the window.

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2006-05-23 04:53:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm... would superman jump through a window after a girl handed him a magnum?Probably, who knows, at least he can fly.

    This was an unique write. I think I understand this and I must say this is probably the most interesting thing I have read all morning.

    I don't really see any problem with this other maybe this line

    'To which she responded “a girl can never be [to] safe”'

    The 'to' that I have bracketed should be 'too' I believe, other than that everything seems to be in order.

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    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      ...lol this made me laugh...

    but i dont understand why you jumped out the window????
    and did you seriously put the magnum on your feet?? lol sorry if i'm a little slow..

    anyways. what i did get from this (which i guess i could be totally wrong) but this is my perspective

    you are with this girl and she hands you a magnum. you look at it like wtf. where did this come from. you've had sex with her before but you never used a magnum...so now you are thinkin maybe she had been messin around with other guys?

    ..is that what this was about? ...that was just my guess.
    lol anyways i thought it was funny. just the image of a person jumping out the window. lol if i were there i would be laughin my a.ss off!
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]


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