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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts toward youdots
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    Author: Dark Angel
    ASL Info:    20/Human/North Carolina
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 261/292/84
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThoughts toward youdots
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    Once again I am full of hatred
    I thought you were different
    But you're just like the rest
    I thought I could trust you
    And just as I trusted you
    You turn around and ruin it all
    Just as my walls were coming down..
    You forced me to build them up
    Higher and thicker than they were before
    Your son meant the world to me
    I would have been all he needed
    His blue eyes and blonde hair
    Was all it took to make me melt
    He had that simple look
    That captivated the soul
    And once again, just like Jacob
    I must learn to let him go
    Just once I would like someone to know
    Exactly what this does
    You coming into my life and saying
    All those wretched things you said
    All it ever did was put ill thoughts in my head
    I never wanted to let you in
    I never wanted to get close
    But I longed for that companionship
    That you seemed able to give
    I wanted to think you'd be the one
    To make everyhting right
    But Again, my heart is hardened
    And I won't let my walls down again
    Not without a fight at least
    So take my words to heart
    Because I won't say it anymore




    Submitted on 2004-05-11 18:16:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hehe(ironic laughter), sorry to laugh, this is a very sad piece, but if this is true then it sounds almost like it was written to me. I can't say I understand you completely, I just can't I'm a guy and I'm alot like the one in the poem, I've done the same things. But good write anyway.
    | Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by Phall | [ Reply to This ]


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