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    dots Submission Name: Park lifedots

    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       hah.. dare me to write a poem about this will ya!!!

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    dotsPark lifedots

    In the shade of a lonely willow tree
    I wait for her to return to me
    To run towards my open arms
    And love me as she always does

    Shes been gone for just a minute or so
    Deep into the pungent undergrowth
    Yet still I pray her safe return
    Clasping the withy she did pursue

    A youth at heart yet worn in years
    Although Ive known her from newborn
    Have raised her as my only child
    And with her created a loving home

    Do you see her sprint out, en route to me
    Dancing and playing as sweet as could be
    Cajoling in pasture untouched by a blade
    Dashing in circles but still finding her way?

    Now we both sit beneath the willow tree
    My hand on her back and her head on me
    Resting here in the open calm
    Just me, with my dachshund under my arm

    Submitted on 2006-05-23 10:50:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lol! i loved this poem on vf, and i still love it here :D
    it's so cute!
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]
      haha. i was not expecting that.adorable stuff.
    nice job!!
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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