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    dots Submission Name: Herodots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Two poems I wrote (by accident) on the same premise, and believe me if you must they are actually both very true


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    dotsHerodots
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    What would it feel like to die a hero?
    To know you sacrificed for the life of one deserved
    Would the feeling carry on into the after world?
    Would the misery of a life of giving nothing be resolved?

    How would it feel to die a hero?
    To help the few who help the few who help the many
    Would it save your very soul from the abyss?
    Would it give hope to you forefathers knowing you are a hero too?

    How do I guarantee I die a hero?
    How do I know who deserves this gift of life I have?
    Will it come within a vision or written on a holy stone?
    Will their name be carved forever in my heart of hearts?

    I wish to die a hero.
    Are you the one I save?

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    How would it feel to die a hero?
    To perish with anotherís life in your arms
    With a tear in your heart maybe?
    Or the lightness of pride in oneself

    Why can I not wait to die a hero?
    This life feels so wasted, I have nothing to give
    But to save just one life that is good
    And maybe that one save you all

    Maybe Iím being vain with feelings of grandeur
    Thinking one life, one sacrifice could mean so much
    But then, if each of us strive to fulfil this ideal
    We could all leave our mark on this world

    How then would it feel to die a hero?
    When no one can pass on and feel pride or hate
    Only quietly in the minds of the saved
    I think yet for myself I may try




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      I like them both, with partiality to the second one. I wanna die a hero, but i havent quite decided what a hero is, guess I have to define that first huh, or do oher people decide, and if they do I mean really wheres the fun in that? I re-read and re-read the first stanza in the first poem but for the life in me I cant get the rhythm, (thats not criticism I just cant read it right) but everything else about that poem I really liked especially how it ends, it sounds so innocent and almost desperate..is wanting to be a hero..a sign of wanting to die or the pride thats gets to come with being a hero (this is a rhetorical question, but feel free to answer) I think (under ideal circumstances) the latter...I enjoyed it as usual, good write.

    Until we write again,
    ~ink~
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      HUH...good question? Just how the heck would that feel? Guess it depends on how the person dies. A quick and simple death, say from jumping in the path of a bullet and taking it in the head. Boom! Instant death. A sort of slow and agonizing death, say from jumping in the path of a bullet and taking it in a vital organ. Boom! Bleeding out.

    Interesting write. And who really knows, right? Only the living.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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