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    dots Submission Name: Bambidots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1345
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1435



    Description:
       A song inspired by the Disney movie Bambi


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    dotsBambidots
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    Consume the lives of all my enemies
    Beautiful killer
    Caress the walls lick at the windows
    Beautiful killer
    Open the door with your smoky fingers
    Beautiful killer
    Embrace the corpses in a dancing fluoresce
    Beautiful killer

    Youíve been my only friend since we first met when I was twelve
    You kept my heart from freezing
    Through those nights of constant teasing
    Broken bones and bloody eyes, face red raw from where Iíd cried
    Wishing for an end to, my sadness

    I was never strong, until your brightness came along
    They sung their melodies of screaming
    With their thrashing, burning, bleeding
    Within those grimy hostel walls, I smile as I recall their calls
    Praying for relief from, their madness

    Consume the lives of all my enemies
    Beautiful killer
    Caress the walls lick at the windows
    Beautiful killer
    Open the door with your smoky fingers
    Beautiful killer
    Embrace the corpses in a dancing fluoresce
    Beautiful killer

    My friend, my beautiful killer
    You helped me through the times I didnít know what I was doing
    Light up the night
    A myriad of colours
    Beautiful sight
    Climbing up the walls
    Help me tonight
    Destroy my loving parents
    Leave their ashes dancing on the floor




    Submitted on 2006-05-23 11:08:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is brilliant, i love your style of writing, its so raw, I like the way the last line wraps up the lyrics like an entire package, your not asking for people to guess what you were talking about, it's obvious but subtle at the same time.
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by sunset | [ Reply to This ]


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