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    dots Submission Name: over and over againdots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    21/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 108/252/162
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 1263
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 612



    Description:
       i wrote this poem after i talked to someone i knew about 2 years ago. We aren't that close anymore, but she saw me on the net, and we stated iming and she sort of spilled her guts.


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    Iím sorry
    I really am
    You know I do stupid things
    Then end up paying for them
    By hurting my family and friends
    I try to do the right thing
    I just canít seem to stick to it
    I tried giving it all up
    Only to fall back into the hole of addiction again
    I know saying sorry over and over again
    Doesnít ever erase the hurt
    But thatís what I do
    Every time I do something wrong
    Its like my life is destined to hurt you all
    Then spend the rest of the time
    Saying Iím sorry
    Over and over again





    Submitted on 2006-05-23 11:10:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I Like the thoghts but this is one that wasn't written very well. Keep writing bring your writing back up again

    shasta
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by easily_ammused | [ Reply to This ]
      hi dere!
    well dis looked like a chain of thoughts dat were wanderin in yr mind, or to say this piece wasn't well crafted. though nevrtheless, the thoughts look really original and heart-stuck, bt a lil hard to trm as poem with no onomotopoeia..nyways keep riting..
    PS: do comment on my works, plz do cm.....lol
    wasif
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by wasif | [ Reply to This ]


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