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    dots Submission Name: Ddots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1045
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 678



    Description:
       Dunno why but I got suddenly inspired while watching "Vampire hunter D"
    Watch it it's good by the way, anyway this is the result


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    dotsDdots
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    Halfbreed
    Halfway twixt day and night
    Halfway 'tween dark and light
    The cliché of abnormality

    Nightmare
    Unborn through fear, undone
    With every raising mornings sun
    Tonight, I shed a tear for you

    Does knowing what you could have been
    Possess your every moment?
    Can being as an outcast
    Manipulate your life?
    While being as you would have been
    Do you regret the time you lost?
    Deprived, of the innocence of youth

    Halfbreed
    Neither true nor a lie,
    Cliche'd or the first time
    You are but lost within rhyme
    Within me!




    Submitted on 2006-05-23 11:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I LOVE IT. I really really really LOVE IT. I almost have no clue what to say, but I did mention that I loved it, right? Its so..."twisted" (I use this term not according to its normal definition but, according to my own vocabulary, where when things cannot be explained, yet you marvel still...) everything is perfect, the rhythm is out of this world, your selection of words, great! My favorite stanza is the third. In the second stanza, is it really "raising mornings sun" or is it "rising mornings sun" in my excitement i become illiterate. Ive only read all 6 "D" novels I could find, but somehow in the midst of all of my weirdness have "acquired a taste" for the movies as well Im partial to the first but "bloodlust" occasionally fills the void. :) I hear there's a new one (book) coming soon...
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      My favourite is the second stanza, everything about it is beautiful but you lost me by the last stanza...I'm not sure maybe I'm missing the point but the last line with the ! mark sounded strange when I read it aloud...perhaps I'm not putting the right emphasis on it. I'm not sure....but that 2nd stanza...BRILLIANT. ~Sunset
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by sunset | [ Reply to This ]


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