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    dots Submission Name: He Misses Herdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       I just got off the phone with my Dad and ...well I just hear these things I never heard before from him---just a feeling of insecurity from him, and I tell him ...hey man I'm here ya know and we can talk if ya need to and he just says yeah ok but we never do or he never calls, to just talk because he needs to. I know now how and why when one person dioes the other is soon to follow...It hasn't even happened yet but it is obvious and apparent to me, and I feel I have no way to stop this from happening. Sorry this is longer than the poem itself, I just have a lot of love for my Dad and hate to see him like this and wished there was something I could do to take away his pain......but there isn't!


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    He Misses Her

    His words scream loneliness
    But he says otherwise
    He is tough, but depressed
    trying to disguise
    his pain
    and how things have changed
    He misses her
    His friend
    His confidante
    His wife
    He misses her
    He misses his life

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2006-05-23 15:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...and as unfortunate as that may seem, at least there is something you can do to take away yours. And yes... you do need it... if your going to catch your dad if... god, allah, the universe or the mailman forbid... he falls.

    I have nothing but respect for this piece. That is all I can give.
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very sad poem and such a difficult thing to deal with. I have seen this happen to many people and more closely to me, both my grandparents. My mom's dad and my dad's mom. They have both outlived their spouse and both had the lifelong love and commitment of many many years together. It is devestating to see how they have so much pain and emptiness and there really isnt much that can be done to make it better. My grandmother lost my grandfather almost 3 years ago and she still feels like it was yesterday. She is lost without him and life has lost all its meaning to her. It breaks my heart and I try to visit with her as much as I can to try and cheer her up but she always ends up talking about him and crying. I feel for your father as I realize what he is going through. This is a very good poem. It really captures this immense loss very well with few words. And it is good that you just continue to offer yourself to him, even if he doesnt take you up on it. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      The feeling of someone you love deerly gone and you are unable to just be with that person or feel the presense....it's almost haunting.

    I know sometimes when things like these happens, it's always hard to open up even when you have someone one who loves you and wants to help you out in any possible way. It's a loss and it can never be replaced just as well as it cannot be changed.

    This piece cannot be argued against. It is dedicated to your dad and only your dad can review this piece to you....We can only be here to share our thoughts and our feelings when it comes to this.

    Just be there for him. If he doesn't call you, call him even if it's just to say hi...When he's ready to tell you what he needs to say, you'll be there for him and that's all that really matters.

    Anyhow, do take care of yourself until next time we meet.

    Irina
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so sad. people heal in different ways and time frames. I mean, in my opinion, i dont think people really heal, because no matter what, that loss is still there. I spose its more like accepting what has happened.

    anyway, just keep letting him know that you're there, and at some point, when he is ready, he will make that call.
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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