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    dots Submission Name: Come Backdots

    Author: liamzamudio
    ASL Info:    15/m/Cardiff
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 7/17/15
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1098

       This was originally part of the poem true friend but the middle sounded like an ending so i split them up.

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    dotsCome Backdots

    Maybe Iím sending mixed signals
    Maybe for some reason you canít see
    But the ever-growing distance between us
    is slowly killing me

    I donít know what to suggest
    And I donít know what to do
    The best solution I have right now
    Is to tell you that I love you

    I donít know if it will help
    I donít know if itís what you want to hear
    I just want you to know it would really help
    For me to just know that youíre here

    I really need you here right now
    When things seem bad like this
    I want to talk like we used to
    Itís the good times weíve had that I miss

    I donít want you to think that Iím blaming you
    For the fact that weíre drifting apart
    And even if you donít want to fix this problem
    There will always be a place for you in my heart

    I need you now like I need air to breathe
    Donít think that Iím lying, I do
    My sky is clouded over with black at the moment
    Come back, be my sun and break through

    Submitted on 2006-05-24 07:04:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It had a certain sadness about it - i could really feel emotion. I thought it quite good, because it was so passionate. Maybe you should try to use more punctuation to vary the sentence structure, so that you can play with the mood more. I think you could be really good!!
    love anna anna
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by anna anna | [ Reply to This ]
      It rhymes, has a nice rhythm. Sweet, true. You're on your way to be a great poet
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by bran_flake | [ Reply to This ]

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