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    dots Submission Name: Nobody Can Bring Me Down!dots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just reflecting on life right now!

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    dotsNobody Can Bring Me Down!dots

    As I was growing up,
    My life was always tough luck,
    I knew I had to give it all I had,
    But my mood was always sad.

    As age began to devour me,
    I knew It was time to change,
    I didn't know who I wanted to be,
    But the old me was going out of range.

    As girls revolved my mind,
    There was never enough time,
    Always crying to get by,
    There was nothing to call mine.

    Love is my only weakness,
    It makes me ill inside,
    Like malaria sickness,
    I know I can't survive,
    It's a must to stay alive.

    I've been hurt too many times,
    Pain always climbed my ladder,
    I came to senses with my mind,
    I knew feelings always had to matter.

    Nowadays I'm prepared,
    I know nobody can bring me down,
    I'm mature and well aware,
    So my smile,
    Would never again wear a frown.

    Submitted on 2004-05-11 20:07:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your poems message to me is quite serious indeed...Why? do i hear death calls...or is it just me... Your poem is well structured and feels intense. I do hope all is well.
    | Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      A great deal of emotion is relayed in this so-so written poem. Don't just write what's in your head, make your head and heart talk for awhile first. With the power behind what you're feeling you have the means to write great things.
    | Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a pretty good poem. I can really relate to this a lot. I really like it. But its a good thing that you're happy now and don't wear a frown any more. I wish I would get to that someday.
    | Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by Rogue | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem. you've put a lot of emotions in this. but you spelled Malaria wrong. and by the way you can survive Malaria. it's not necessarily lethal. but I enjoyed your poem very much, just change the little typo.
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]

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