Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Cut me open, u wont like what u seedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 856
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1124



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCut me open, u wont like what u seedots
    -------------------------------------------


    I guess itís all still written,
    and smeared across my face.
    Just dirty enough,
    to make myself my own disgrace.
    Please donít look at me,
    it hurts to look at you.
    Now it kills to know
    what I wish I never knew.
    Your words cut me deep
    only deeper with this vow,
    Öjust because I love you,
    but I bleed to know how.
    Öjust because you love me,
    I know it will never change.
    Its worse for me to hurt you,
    your tears seep from my veins.
    Running down my arm,
    they burn along my skin.
    You wonít have to notice
    because all my scars fade in.
    Thatís why Iím ugly on the inside,
    Pictures never fade away.
    I can see them when you ask me
    but I donít know what to say.
    I could talk until I choke
    but my silence says it all.
    I can hear it in your voice
    and Iíve never felt so small.
    Now I canít feel your touch,
    it only makes me feel ashamed.
    Thatís why Iím sorry that you love me,
    Iím already used and stained.





    Submitted on 2006-05-24 11:14:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      this poem is so intense. the feelings and emotions wrapped into it was unbelievable. i loved the part where you said

    i could talk until i choke but my silence says it all. i can hear it in your voice and i've never felt so small.

    it was so hard hitting and amazing. i love it.
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I love this poem. I can definatly relate to the emotions. So deep and sad. I know how it feels to be a cutter and how you wonder how someone can love you.

    I like the rythm and flow in this poem. Very fast and energizing. It's love at first read. I am adding it to my favs. Consider your self stalked... Mwhahaha....

    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      i've read a couple other poems by you and i want to let you know your work is [censored]in awesome. really.
    "Just dirty enough,
    to make myself my own disgrace."
    these lines were great. you really have talent. keep it up.....
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good, I really liked it.. my fav part:

    Its worse for me to hurt you,
    your tears seep from my veins.
    Running down my arm,
    it burns along my skin.
    You wont have to notice
    because all my scars fade in.
    Thatís why Iím ugly on the inside,


    I really get that bit.

    I <3 it.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      I could talk until I choke
    but my silence says it all.
    I can hear it in your voice
    and Iíve never felt so small.
    Now I cant feel your touch,
    it only makes me feel ashamed.
    Thatís why Iím sorry that you love me,
    Iím already used and stained.

    good stuff there

    I'm not so sure I understood any of your relations to blood, bleeding, or veins... they really don't make sense. I understand that tons of people have this obsession with blood or bleeding for someone... but I never have quite got that, unless you truly do have to be hurt for them. And usually I can accept the metaphor a little easir but here it just seems forced. I like this piece though, you put a lot of emotion into it, I think you have something going.

    Tom
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      wow I really enjoyed reading this piece, it was so deep and honest, bare and pure. I love the way you wrote this and I love the way you expressed yourself, the words just seem to flow together and touch the reader to the core of their being. I honestly mean this and Im not saying this just to see myself write but because I really enjoyed your piece. I love they way you described the way you feel so sad, depressed and dead. I can relate to what you feel even though its in a different situation.

    Running down my arm,
    it burns along my skin.
    You wont have to notice
    because all my scars fade in

    I love this part because its like I can imagine the pain hurting you inside and no one notices because they cant see beyong the physical.

    I also loved the part

    I could talk until I choke
    but my silence says it all.
    I can hear it in your voice
    and Iíve never felt so small.
    Now I cant feel your touch,
    it only makes me feel ashamed.
    Thatís why Iím sorry that you love me,
    Iím already used and stained.

    this part was like the best, the part that really hit me deep and your words were amazing.

    thanks for the great read and I hope that everything turns out well

    andy V.
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
      I never commented on this? Why?? I've read it like a thousand times and I love every goddamn word of it!!!

    Well, I'll do it now (since I have nothing but free time these days).

    The blood... I get it, and I love the way you used it.
    The title is [censored] amazing too, by the way.

    You are brilliant, Samm.

    You have such a sad, dark, pretty way of describing things.
    That makes it seem so real. Things are dark and sad.

    Well, Momma keeps talking to me, so I'm gonna go now.

    Byee Samm

    As always,
    Beautifully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    104578

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    The World written by jjd
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    no sky on the other side written by teika5

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry