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    dots Submission Name: Diabolical Schemedots
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    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsDiabolical Schemedots
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    I twist in sick pleasure
    I welcome with a smile, psychotic
    the process to accelerate excitement in the treat
    I do confide in morbid methods and extremes

    I embrace you!
    I awake you to the point of only trembles
    lost so deep with fire hate constructed
    with nine needles in your skull to employ the leakage
    reinventing the enviromental peek of crimson visions
    i leave you in agreement to the silent treatment

    I observe you with a smirk at ease
    a twitch affects me as "FIEND", the air you breathe
    creator or creature leaves my name on either side
    defining the reality of sanity with lies.




    Submitted on 2006-05-24 16:24:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OK, and you thought "Queen of the Dead" was scary? I mean "ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" very scary. This is some kind of psychotic poem, it's crazy.
    My favorite part was this part

    "I twist in sick pleasure
    I welcome with a smile, psychotic
    The process to accelerate excitment in the treat
    I do confide in morbid methods and extremes."

    I don't know why, but that just sticks out so much and made me want to keep going, but the rest of the poem didn't have so much excitment to it. It was a very good ending to the poem, but it doesn't give so much excitment as the first four lines do.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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