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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDreamdots
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    Of you I dream
    my love
    but you're only that

    a dream
    a figment
    an illusion

    What I wouldn't give
    to make you real
    to make you mine

    The challenges I wouldn't face
    to see you just once
    to kiss your sweet lips

    I wish I could hold you
    feel the softness of your hair
    see the brilliance of your eyes

    But your nothing
    only in my mind
    the love I could only desire

    Even then...
    I could love another
    but I will always love you

    Regardless if your nothing
    your still apart of me
    a beautiful glorious dream




    Submitted on 2006-05-24 20:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is beautiful' i am currently going through this exact situation that you wrote about it's like you think about it so much that it feels so real but yet you know in your mind that it could never be and even if you do fall in love with someone else which normally is the case then what the two of you had shared and all your hopes and dreams and wants for this person are so precious to you "even though nothing ever happened" that they kinda become a part of you
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by always thinking | [ Reply to This ]


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