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True Love

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
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Words: 106
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I know this drags on but tell me what you think....

And I must propose a poetic True Love, may we all find it someday....cheers

True Love

Of you I dream, my love

In full moon's light
I see your face
an illusion
passion, lust, desire, love

In the bird's sweet song
I hear your voice
calling tempting song
happiness, security, hope, love

In the ocean
I feel your touch
the warm cold embrace
pain, saddness, seperation, love

The fire, my love
is the emotions we have
the burning growing feeling
passion, desire, lust, love

In the glowing aurora
I see your soul
the glorious bright being
passion beauty desire love

And in the summer breeze
I feel your kiss
the sweet taste
one thing...


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  This is a beautiful poem. It is so full of imagery and emotion. I admit that I have never had this kind of love, but it sounds wonderful. You are so luck to have found it. In echo of your toast, cheers. ~jennah
| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]

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