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    dots Submission Name: untitled & disgusting.dots
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    Author: taramarie
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 54/107/61
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       this is disgusting.


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    heart attack all over your sleepy face.
    cover you with strawberry children
    and hope you don't cut your fingers off with
    the petals of angles and horse teeth are falling
    out of your ears.
    you gutted the pillows and now
    i have nothing to hide all my secrets in. fucker.
    we climbed in the bathtub
    and cut out pictures of our favourite celeb-prettys.
    we watched shooting stars shoot up the atmosphere.
    nothing felt as good.
    nothing felt as...
    i got into a fist fight with the monsters
    that hide in the glitter gutters.
    when i broke his nose cocaine dripped out.
    he broke my ribs apart and stuck them in a cake.
    i made more birthday wishes. & blew it all out.
    you fall in love with the rhinestone girls that
    have sharp bones and bangs falling into their eyes.
    we have sex on the greased streets behind all
    people who really fell in love.
    you carve your psalms into my back
    with the bones from a vulture you pulled from the jaws of your father.
    i suck off the salt from you lips
    and hope infection doesn't occur.
    when we fall asleep
    in our tin can ocean bottom honeymoon suit
    you groan and pull at my limbs.
    i wake up with your prints & teeth.
    we shower in the hopes of pealing off
    the people we became.
    i'd kill to see that girl go down the drain.




    Submitted on 2006-05-24 21:12:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have a way with images. A stupid person would read this and say... "what????" Let's thank the big whatever that we aren't those people.
    "you fall in love with the rhinestone girls that
    have sharp bones and bangs falling into their eyes.
    we have sex on the greased streets behind all
    people who really fell in love.
    you carve your psalms into my back"

    that part cuts me like motherf*cker.... and this one:

    "we shower in the hopes of pealing off
    the people we became.
    i'd kill to see that girl go down the drain."


    yes, that one, too.

    now if you want constructive criticism here's a bit, but take it with salt because I'm no genious:
    You might run these through a spell checker before you post because when people get emotional spelling is the first element to go.
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by parabola | [ Reply to This ]
      damn!!! this is the best sh!t it've read in a while...it makes my blood run hot as trickles of intense wonder and intrest caress every inch of my pleasure expreancing body...this turned me on..and made me want some of the pain and the intension behind the unknown motaves...it was truly good and well written!
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is Fu**ing awesome. I love the way I had no idea what it was about, but I couldn't stop reading it. It drew me in like a bad highway accident. I just couldn't look away. I can't wait to read more of your stuff. I'm adding this to my favs.
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by chrls | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good. explicit, out there, this is what i am poetry. and whats funny is there are people out there that will read this and says thats not poetry, thats not art, but ironically this is better than all the "i love you" bull[censored] because this is real and you cant hide behind a sweet statement with something like this. good job.
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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