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    dots Submission Name: infected mindsdots
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    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 1108
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 817



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    dotsinfected mindsdots
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    rejected, we become the infected x3
    rejected
    no more, can we sit and just take it,
    how long, before we rise up and break it
    criticized, throughout all of our lives
    so despised, we are seen through your eyes...
    rejected, we become the infected x3
    rejected, rejected
    it is your words, that make our brains decay,
    you dont like us but you made us this way,
    on us you spit, telling us that were not shit,
    telling us there so much that we just dont get,
    reject, x18
    you will be shunned, all that cared have abandoned
    you will get none, you are left out cold and stranded
    branded, no forms left of distinction
    you and your kind on the brink of extinction,

    infected, we all are rejected x3




    Submitted on 2006-05-24 23:35:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. I love that.
    You are so talented. lol I'm fascinated.
    It's so hard to come across great stuff like this, these days.
    The rhyming is brilliant too.

    What else can I say?

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      well... , short and panned ../. not much emotional shine .../. but very well stated u got your point out on the table ..../. my fav' line is :

    you dont like us but you made us this way

    keep writing

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      I think Slipknot's just inspired you to write this, mi right?
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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