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    dots Submission Name: Spoken Wordsdots
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    Author: forestspirit
    ASL Info:    21/m/inside
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 58/45/27
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 779
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 620



    Description:
       This was written simultaneously with "Prophecy". This was another queer flow that I had. Also a reflection on something that happened to me. Something to do with disagreements and discontentments.


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    dotsSpoken Wordsdots
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    So speak, I am not here.
    The world changing around us
    Has it entwined you with deep roots?
    Are you entangled and ensnared?
    Say what you have to say,
    I have just spoken my part of the tale.
    There is too much ignorance
    Mind is not divided just shared amongst sane.
    Insanity defined a birth to fame.
    We all who live to see
    Will, some day die to speak.
    A glass may be broken
    The crystal ship shattered to shards
    The water still exists even if not in a hold
    Running free, running wild
    Madly into madness, dissolving soil




    Submitted on 2006-05-25 03:16:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm ok i really like the way this poem starts a sort of haunting tone the images drawn are chilling to a certain degree but quite honestly i didnt like the ending that much madly into madness sort of blows the omnious tone the poem was going with not that it makes this a poem but rather this had the potential to be a great poem rather then a really good one good work :)
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by Shadows Life | [ Reply to This ]


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