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WAITING


Author: realpassion
ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81 /70 /50
Words: 29
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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WAITING



Eyes peered wildly
Through hazy window,
Longing with intense desire
To awaken your faraway smiles...

Hours like years slow in coming
Cos' tommorrow seem to fade
Into forever.




Submitted on 2006-05-25 09:10:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it has a passionate tone but it needs more content...you just don't have enough to this to be truly liked by me...i don't feel your desiring side your intense nature...
| Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]


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