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    dots Submission Name: Male P.M.S.dots
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    Author: vintagepepper
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    7.05 - 191/153/46
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1439
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    Bytes: 831



    Description:
       ok...anyone who tells me "MEN DO NOT P.M.S. i'm simply not going to listen to you. ...i have been with my boyfriend over 2 and a half years and every month EVERY MONTH...like clockwork (and it NEVER fails...hasnt yet.) when i'm on my period he goes through this week of "i'm not happy with you. things arent working out, i dont know if i love you anymore. BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH!" ...sometimes it lasts a week, sometimes longer sometimes it only lasts a few days. and sometimes its worse than others. ...but yea two days ago i told him i didnt want him to go through pms this month (this week) because its really starting to take a toll on me..and he was like i dont think thats going to happen this time. blah blah blah. he said everything was GREAT with us. and then yesterday (i started...sorry for the details..but it only makes this poem make sense) and then this morning he tells me well yea i have a problem with us BLAH BLAH BLAH. and he went into whatever he went into. im at the point where i'm so fed up with it cuz he makes me feel like im not worth him. like im not good enough and what not. but the rest of the month he seems to love me...thats why the word love is in quotation marks...anyways. this was a result of anger from the whole situation this morning...enjoy

    let me know what you think! :-)


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    That monthly time comes rollin’ in
    And of course, rules do not bend
    You are false to that empty plea,
    You stated only to comfort me.

    And of course like clockwork sour
    Your mind doth tick, and you doth lower
    As you spit cursed allegations
    That pierce me with sick lacerations

    Every month this tears a hole
    In my ever weakening soul
    Why would you hurt the one you “love,”
    Angry eyes and heart thereof

    But can I stand this brutal beating
    Of my conscience and my meaning
    Every single month a’coming
    When I feel this pain forthcoming

    Malice brews with strange excess
    Inside of me from painful stress
    And by your actions I will guess
    It’s time for your male P.M.S.




    Submitted on 2006-05-25 09:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ok, I thought that this piece was pretty funny, in it's presentation, i especially enjoyed the change from regular speach to the pseudo old english, and back again. The title was especially catchy. But your relationship sounds a lot like the one I just watched my sister go through, and I have to seriously suggest that you approach him and tell him flat out that either he needs to stop pulling your strings, or you're walking, because you seriously don't need to take that kind of emotional onslaught every month, regardless of the excuse.

    I won't argue that men don't have PMS, because yeah, we do. I'v just taken to calling it Dick Head Complex(DHC), since we don't even have the excuse of bleeding from the inside(mensturating, where the M in PMS comes from) that you women do, unless I'm due for some really unplesant surprise that I don't know about.

    Anyhow, I enjoyed this piece, a lot, and I sincerely hope that you can resolve your relationship problems.
    Salaam.
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Rastine Aristat | [ Reply to This ]
      HA HA HA

    I have been married to the same woman fro 25 yrs and yes youare correct that men do PMS when their wifes are visited by aunt flow.

    I also have three daughters and believe me it is like a mad house during these times.
    BUT, I don't think there is a chemical problem or that it is even PMS. I believe that it a reaction from te males to the PMSing of the woman. When in rome do as the romans do.

    I think it is also like a man craving differnt foods when the wife is pregnant.
    Sympathy cravings I think.

    Also because we live in such close quarters with the woman during these times it becomes almost impossible to not have those same emotions to rub off on us. We just deal emotionally different than the woman.

    Well, I did understand the write and got a chuckle from the description.
    When A woman is visited at this time of month her senses and feelings are more atuned to everything around them and therefore the man is left confused and dazed.


    Nicely said

    Respect

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      That monthly time comes rollin’ in
    And of course, rules do not bend
    You are false to that empty plea,
    You stated only to comfort me.

    And of course like clockwork sour
    Your mind doth tick, and you doth (lower)
    As you spit cursed allegations
    That pierce me with sick lacerations

    Every month this tears a hole
    In my ever weakening soul
    Why would you hurt the one you “love,”
    Angry eyes and heart thereof

    But can I stand this brutal beating
    Of my conscience and my meaning
    Every single month a’coming (?)
    When I feel this pain forthcoming

    Malice brews with strange excess
    Inside of me from painful stress
    And by your actions I will guess
    It’s time for your male P.M.S.

    "Malice brews with strange excess;" very nice line to describe an unexplainable emotional upheval (which may be the result of an insecure alpha male who needs to be center of all attention both positive and negative). I'm not sure about the third line of the second to last strophe; 'a'coming' and 'forthcoming' seem to be the result of desperately adhering to a strict rhyme scheme to demonstrate your frustration. BTW, did you mean 'lower' rather than 'lour' in the second line of the second strophe? Those two lines may need some work as well.

    In general, you've gotten the point across concerning the rollercoaster known as emotion (and the lunatic pleasures of relationship).

    Hope it gets better.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee!! Hahahahaaa!! Ok...sorry...but I couldnt help but laugh...this is [censored] funny!! hahaha! I hear ya. Men are as, if not more touchy than women. They just wont admit it hee hee!! I know this wasnt written to be humorous so I will take a more serious approach here. Although, being a woman, I did find it very amusing and I can relate to this a bit. But, I wonder if you should lay things on the line with this guy and tell him if he doesnt knock it off, you will leave. Then if he continues, you should leave. This is no way to live. Life is too short for petty stuff like this and if he doesnt know what he wants or how to control his moods, then you should consider being done with it. Relationships are not easy and take a lot of work but they should be happy for the most part. Anyway, hee hee, this made me smile, although I think this situation makes you very frustrated and angry. Good luck and thanks for the smile!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      the title caught my eye, and as a guy myself i agree some of us can seem to have our own form of pms. in fact in alot of cases its much worse then any of the girls i know *cough cough my brother cough* but it was an amusing poem... sounds like a song weird al could sing lol thanks for the smile ;-) keep writing

    SAM
    | Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by speedrocketguit | [ Reply to This ]


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