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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Angel Chronicles IIIdots
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    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 179/157/47
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1089
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1231



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    dotsFallen Angel Chronicles IIIdots
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    Walking down the street she passes by
    All the things this world has to try
    She lives on hopes, on dreams
    And believes there's more to life behind the
    scenes
    She walks down her narrow road
    Never letting anyone in to lighten her load
    It's been much too long that she's been alone
    She keeps to herself, writing her own song

    Thunder and lightning- a release for the pain
    That the world plays on like a game
    Screams of anguish- a trubute for the devil
    For trying to stay out of Hell

    Livin to the music of her own private song
    her movements are the rhythm that doesn't
    quite belong
    But she tries so hard to stay true to herself
    All but ignoring the burning comments she felt
    She won't cry her tears
    And she relives her fears
    Everyday she finds new strength
    That she hopes that at some length,

    The thunder and lightning will release her pain
    That the world laughs at like it's a game
    Her screams of anguish as she cries out to
    heav'n
    Asking if she'll ever be herself again




    Submitted on 2006-05-25 11:04:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      By the gods below...I absolutely love your work babe. It's always interesting. Even when it's not what you could call good or bad, it's interesting. I'd rather be interesting than good. It's more fun that way.

    I love the ideas behind this. It's hard to get a feel for it, just because lyrics are a different brand. The music has to come from the soul of the composer. If you got with somebody who does that sort of thing, you could probably work up a pretty good thing from this. It's totally wicked, just like Rupert Grint.

    Keep it real serafuku. 1000 bonus points if you know what that means.

    Love ya,
    Vanessa
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]


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