Too Late by PryncessVynom

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Submission Name: Too Late dots

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Author:	PryncessVynom
ASL Info:	21/f/amarillo Tx
Elite Ratio:	3.34 - 983/1060/230
Words:	58

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	480
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	421

Description:
READ ME!!!!! (meaning the description) dont' read this if you are a stickler for all the set in stone stuff like rythm and rhyme and all that this was written in pain and thats how it will stay. I'll take suggestions but it'll stay mostly like this, cause it hurts and i never want to revise it again.

Too Late dots

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I know you hear the anger,
But do you hear the pain?
I know you see the hate,
But do you feel my love?
Vehement,
Passionate,
Hurting,
Yearning,
Those are the words I feel,
"I hate him" I say angrily
"I just want to be loved." I whisper forlornly
Anger
Hate
Love
Too late....Too late....

Submitted on 2004-05-11 21:33:35 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I've been here so many times before. You have all these feelings and emotions but they all seem to contradict each other and you don't know what to do. So what do you do? Go nuts!

I thought the form worked really well here. Can't complain about something when its really good.
~Aaron
| Posted on 2004-05-21 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
  Isn't is supposed to be "Too Late"? I loved how it started, it really gives the feeling of strong emotions.
| Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by Rocky Raccoon | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how it started. It lost me toward the end though. Keep it up. Good work.
| Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by Primal | [ Reply to This ]
  Your lines are broken well for reader pause so I have no prob with your form. Agree on the Too late would probably end with "Too late..." but that's just me.
Hope it was theraputic and you can put it behind you.
jan
| Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
  its never to late, you poor thing, you have been so angry lately, I wish there is something I could do for you. I am sorry that you are going through tough times, but you just have to think, it can only get better, instead of it can only get worse. Try and cheer up, you have a long life ahead of you, don't let things like this ruin your life.
| Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
  You echo my heart. The pain is like a knife cutting, raw and sharp and gaping. It never seems to heal and will always remain stark in your memories.

The emotion is strong and comes out in your words. Glad to see it get onto "paper" instead of festering somewhere (You could read my own 'Bury it Deep' for a taste of festering fear.)
| Posted on 2004-05-14 00:00:00 | by Syndl | [ Reply to This ]

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