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    dots Submission Name: Quarries and cat tailsdots
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    Author: all the english boys
    ASL Info:    15
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173/239/46
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsQuarries and cat tailsdots
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    flooding the quarry
    the rocks explode and crawl in the shallow pools
    among the nocturnal butterflies
    who embark on their irredescent flights among the cat tails
    the pebbles burst like fireworks
    a drudgery of sensual smoothness
    the current lags towards nightfall
    but labors steadily on
    ten million picked roses float
    and travel through the pestilence and the suffering
    no bitter pills can stop this exuberant parade
    this train stops for no wan
    the wings crushed on the heavy debris
    the children voice their hunger pains
    but the smiles never falter




    Submitted on 2004-05-11 22:03:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what are quarranties? other than that i really like this poem, though i'm probably missing the meanign since i don't know what the q word is but yeah. I like the last line alot, pretty cool.
    Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-05-11 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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