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    dots Submission Name: Becoming Another Worlddots

    Author: Dipsomniac
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 59/70/18
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBecoming Another Worlddots

    Outside the black
    Takes strength
    But inside
    I become
    Another World

    Light and sound
    Lead my way
    Beyond the portal's glare
    Into a world where Furies reign.

    Oh sorrow, lead me there
    And rock me gently into slumber
    Give me not the unholy number
    And spare my eyes your coins.

    I fly and fly
    Into the orb of light
    As wax and feathers drip
    I see my Father's eyes.

    Forgive me.
    I stole these wings.
    And now
    I am

    Another World.

    Submitted on 2006-05-25 23:14:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      he's back!!! hey alan
    so i dont know if i can give u the commenct u dserve on such a write, but im gonna try anyways

    so i got that ur refering to like the greek mythology stories .. the story of Icarius and how he flew too high and too low ... and then the river styx and how u need two coins to pass ... i liked how you used them in ur poem .. are you talking about death?

    like from the beginning of the story it seems that u r engulfed by death and then u r lead to the other world by light and by sound .. is that what it is abouit?? yea as u can see im not the best at interpreting poems, but i try ... anywho, im probably far off on what i did get :( hehe
    but yea i liked it though,, like how u presented ur ideas and all .. the flow ... my favorite stanza would have to be

    Oh sorrow, lead me there
    And rock me gently into slumber
    Give me not the unholy number
    And spare my eyes your coins.

    ok so yea ... im gald to see ur work again!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! haha
    and i hope to see YOU next week OK?!?! u better show up sometime!!!!
    take care alan,
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by DeepsLighter | [ Reply to This ]

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