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    dots Submission Name: My Finest Pearldots
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    Author: CaramelCandy
    ASL Info:    37 Female NYC
    Elite Ratio:    6.07 - 118/144/57
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1342
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    Description:
       To My Beautiful and Loving Daughter...Saby J.

    Author's Comments:

    "My Mother, Carmen A., wrote this poem about me long ago and she wanted me to post it on the Poets' Workshop. She thought it would be nice to share it with those who take time to view my poems."


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    dotsMy Finest Pearldots
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    Knowing you before the birth
    made your arrival seem more like a myth.
    Gentle pats said I'll always be here
    just showing you that I am near.

    A smile that spread all your sweetness;
    your arms that gave so much tenderness.
    Little feet running toward me
    for every mistake you have made.

    I minded each day, as you grew.
    I understood my reasons were true.
    Then I realized life's full of rewards
    for having a small girl in my arms.

    Every day you sprung taller and taller;
    comprehending my part was growing smaller.
    In bringing a beautiful person into the world;
    For God gave me the Finest Pearl.


    2006, Saby J., All Rights Reserved




    Submitted on 2006-05-26 03:06:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nothing sweeter than the words of a loving mother.

    I don't think anyone can say it better.

    Mothers have a way of letting you know just how special you are through those knowing touches or just a small knowing smile.

    I think your mother did a great job here Saby.

    Gladd to see you writting again.

    Later

    Respect and Admiration

    CLyde
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      *Tears* Such a beautiful poem. Fills me with emotions. I can not help but think of my little sister. I was there since the beginning. Always thinking of her, always protecting her and making the same mistakes with her I swore I would never make with my children. She has been a big influence in my life. My inspiration, my guiding light, the smile that shines to the east. My sun. My moon. My star. My baby. She is such a cute sister.

    Anyway getting back to the poem. Kudos to your mom. This was great and its such a special gift to a daughter. I wish more mothers told their daughters how much they loved them. It is very important that both parties feel loved.
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      You're mom has some talent. i really like this piece. although i have never had a child of my own, and known the joys of being a mother... your mom has given me a small glimps of that... and i cant wait to be there myself. i think my favorite stanza in this was

    "A smile that spread all your sweetness;
    your arms that gave so much tenderness.
    Little feet running toward me
    for every mistake you have made."

    i think i like this one the best because... my mom and dad use to tell me that when i was a toddler, and i would do something wrong, and i KNEW it was wrong... i would come running to them with my arms thrown out making kissy faces. lol... they also said it got me out of a lot of trouble cause it was so cute :-P

    i really did like this write. tell your mother, that she is talented, and thank you for the brief glimps through a mothers eyes :-)

    -Poetic
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Poetic | [ Reply to This ]


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