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    dots Submission Name: Now Am Founddots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 669
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1011
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1600



    Description:
       eh, self realization??? Hope?? A prayer?? eh


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    dotsNow Am Founddots
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    Now Am Found

    Time has come to be one for all
    Itís who ya got to be
    Youíve been ignoring the call
    Youíve seen it for sometime
    Youíre not dreaming,
    Itís always on your mind
    So start believing

    Itís time to find
    yourself beneath that mess
    Somewhere, in there
    is your best,
    you've got to invest
    some time in you
    and do
    what you want to do
    cause no-ones gonna do it for you
    you always said
    you are the only one who adores you

    Itís time
    Itís not too late
    To navigate
    this ship
    out of the shit
    right through that depression
    and vices I will not mention

    Itís time
    to stand up and be a man
    be a fan of love
    learn compassion
    and try to understand
    Once, youíre willing to see
    even the darkness shines brightly
    and it will.....right on top of me

    lamemansterms




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      that reminds me of those poets in the cafe that will tell their poetry, and everyone is snapping. The rhyme scheme really threw me off (sorry) and made it really hard to stay on the poem. (this does not seem like it will be a good comment, but im really, really sorry and hope your not ofended by it.) I like the way it was put in the way you speak, that shows a lot of originality. It also is a good topic that really makes you stop and think for a while, your poem makes a person looks inside them. It was really emotional. Pretty much what i'm getting out of your poem is that you have to stand up for what you know you need to stand up for, whether it's telling someone the truth about something or telling a bully to back off and leave you alone. It's pretty much saying you have to step up and be a "man", so to speak, and do what you got to do. As Tommy Pickles from the Rugrats always said " A baby's got to do, what a baby's got to do." Pretty much, that's what I think your poem is about.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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