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Love is a Bitch


Author: diamonds_2_dust
ASL Info:    15/m/Eugene Oregon
Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 105 /161 /35
Words: 154
Class/Type: Poetry /I hate you
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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i think it's obvious what happened.... the fucking bitch....


Love is a Bitch



you learn to trust
you learn to love
you answer your lust
and pay in blood
you open your heart
and they fuck it up
and i'm gonna stop
i've had enough

i've been stabbed in the back
one too many times
and i opened up
but they hid behind blinds
i devoted myself
promised never to switch
but it did me no good
cause love is a bitch

I would drop the world
just to be with you
but you didn't really give a fuck
you just faked it and i got used
but like you said "it was empty"
so why should i care
all these tears down my face
should not be there
I'll cry myself to sleep
but that's okay
i'd be better of
single all my days
than being stuck
with you
and what you call love
go fuck someone else
i've had enoguh




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  I love the emotion in this poem! It really comes through when you are reading it. And I found myself reading faster to really get the anger out of it. You did a great job!
| Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by Kelly17 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a very strong and powerful write. It was written well without flaw. I do think you shoulf have put it in stanzas, the structure it has now didn't take away from the poem, I just think it's be better that way. As for the inspiration, I disagree. I no longer believe love is a bi.tch as you say. Once upon a time I did, until I realized after many heart breaks that the love I felt wasn't true if they didn't love me back. You made have had strong feelings for this girl, but I'm sure it wasn't love. As my boyfriend taught me, Love isn't love unless both people feel it for one another. Great poem. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading..

>:D Unwantd
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by UnwantdX_XScars | [ Reply to This ]
  You are good writer. You are good at expressing you feelings in such a beautiful way. I can toatly relate to this poem. And love is a [censored], they say that love is the most powerful thing ut in my eyes its a powerful thing that just tears you aprat. makes you wanna die and cry for the rest fo your days. I hope you can get through this...but in the right way. Take care.

~Christina aka POETRY
| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
  "i devoted myself
promised never to switch
but it did me no good
cause love is a [censored]"

I love that. The whole things awesome.
All the emotion you put into it shows in every line.

Very nicely done
-nikkki
| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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