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    dots Submission Name: his touch.dots
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    Author: century
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 3/6/4
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 646
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 489



    Description:
       cheerio!i love him!


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    dotshis touch.dots
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    his touch,
    leads me like grace.
    his touch,
    holds my face.

    his love,
    makes me have joy.
    his love,
    never felt this before.

    his hands,
    clasp mine with trust.
    his hands,
    i can't love them enough.

    his eyes,
    are like grey mounds.
    his eyes,
    see all around.

    his heart,
    i'll love till the end.
    his heart,
    just makes me win!




    Submitted on 2006-05-26 11:09:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    you cannot love him baby doll!
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      you said 'how can you do that with words?'

    and i say, 'You just did, Squeak!'.

    and your's rhymes, too; much better than mine!!

    what a Poet you've become, Princess.

    it's astonishing how talented you are, my little Muse.

    am i gushing? i can't help it. i never wrote this well when i was you're age.

    you will be a much better poet than i could ever dream of being.

    i love you,
    with all my heart,

    Mom
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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