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    dots Submission Name: We Stand Watchingdots
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    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I got a little help with the title. Thanks Glen.


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    dotsWe Stand Watchingdots
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    Orange flames lick at a dawn sky
    The wind howls
    As newly green trees bow to kiss the ground
    We stand watching
    When we know we should fall
    Cupping my hand around yours
    We stare at our home burning
    Rain starts pouring from the sky
    Like salty tears fall from our eyes
    Soon the ash and rain will mix
    Creating an artificial cement
    Trapping what is left of our lives inside
    As the raging flames are quieted
    So are we




    Submitted on 2006-05-26 13:10:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought of it again after I went home yesterday.

    A vast forest fire in Vicoria, Australia ended when heavy rain came; just a month ago. I saw TV scenes of people just like yours in this poem, except that the season was summer and the time evening. Tears and all. They would sometimes wander forward slowly and pick up something out of the ashes; but mostly these folk stood and looked at their burnt homes. About 100 homes burned that week.

    Reminded me of a mini poem of mine, then:

    Seeds in hot sand:
    meanings before
    gentle rain
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      It looks like a devastated family not yet thinking about what to do next.

    So quiet
    Spring's beginning
    After everything
    We stand watching
    What is left

    hey, I like this game "Think of a title"!

    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Homeless Dawn?
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is avery static write ../. maybie ../.
    wild nature ../. would be a good title ..../. on the other hand i enjoyed the poem / very well put ../. keep writing and expressing .../. cool pic

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      Name it OMG I LOVE MARY AND SHE IS SO SEXY AND I WANT TO SCREW HER PRIVATES PASSIONATELY.

    :)
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by DreamofOrganon | [ Reply to This ]
      I just wanted to say thank you for commenting on my rainey day. I have been away for awhile and do not recall if I have said Thank you. So thank you!...
    As for this one...
    Its hard for me to think of a title for this one because it is descriptive but not exagerated on... I only get a vauge sence of wonder from the fire and nature surrounding the loss of the house and life once lived there.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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