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    dots Submission Name: irrelevantdots
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    Author: GorgeousCorpse
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 19/17/9
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 1160
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       i was bored...


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    dotsirrelevantdots
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    isn't it funny
    that the things that are funny
    are always only temporary anyway
    and the sad and mean
    and bad and obscene
    are the things that never seem to up and go away
    between ups and downs
    there's less smiles than frowns
    and what a shitty thing it is to look forward to
    nobody loves you
    the way that you do
    and in the end your best friend turns out to be just you




    Submitted on 2006-05-26 16:33:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so effing clever.
    and when something just relates so well and in your head you're like "wow, I know"...

    I loved the whole piece, but i do favor the first few lines and the last two.

    though I think the message gets broken up a tad during "between ups and downs" though that is pointless nit picky [censored] and...yeah

    may I add this to my favorites?
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]


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