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existence without essence


Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I don't quite understand the concept myself. This is a glimpse on my perception on existentialism. Maybe I am confused, who knows? Only me I guess. Anyways, any comments will be appreciated.


existence without essence



Life just is
It is neither fair nor just
Everyday that goes by is a product of our choices

When I fall I have no one to blame but myself
Therefore when I stand up I have no one to congratulate but me
The only person that you are in charge of is yourself

You live for you
And die for you
In the end all that is left is you

Life is nothing
And because life is nothing
Then you have no barriers
Since you have no limits
Then you can achieve anything

You are free

The only thing that you can be sure of
Is that you live
You breathe
You are you
No matter whom that might be

I still don’t get it myself
But that is also the beauty of life
That you are able to question it

There are no right and wrong answers
In reality there really aren’t answers
All you have is questions

Let those questions guide you

Life is made up of choices.
The human being is always changing

The human being is born without essence
He adds essence to his life by experience.
Wisdom gives him essence

There are so many things I still don’t understand
So many things left unanswered
And every day is full of wonder
I live each day knowing it might be my last
And though I may not be the wisest
I realize that no matter what might happen
All I have is this moment

In knowing that I find happiness
Even if it is for a brief moment
That moment of happiness
Is the last hope that remains







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  I really enjoyed this... im not too good at critiquing, but my perspective sorta is much the same as you... and your poem,,,
| Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm,

Live is what we make of it and is the truth of it all.
Your poem has some rather interesting takes on life, one being that we are born without essence. Essence to me is what we are made up of. Essence is life and and the breath we take into our bodies. Essence of ourselves and who we are and who we will become.

If we at some point find that we understand life we then become unable to enjoy the wonders of being alive. I beleive life is supposed hold secrets that we as human must decode in order to advance. It is like living in a big puzzle. We are evolving and learning always and that is why life is pefect. We shouldn't get to see the big picture because we are the big picture.

Questions exist so that they can be answered and sometimes there is no right or wrong answer because the answer must fit into all our lives somehow.

You have pondered a great deal here for one so young.

In a nut shell...life is what we are and if we are not, then we are alive.

Nice write little one

Respect and Admiration

Clyde
| Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  i honestly think while you were writing this piece...you were questioning your every word wondering life itself...The answer is you have no answers just options depending on your situation....As they say the truth has many options depending on which side you want to see....Today nothing is static and thinking that something should be static is wrong...life goes on as you experience new stuff....

I was kinda starting to wonder if a person has essence when they are born but then i thought of what essence meant to me and that was the soul....the life we have inside of us and without that....we really cannot live and cannot experience stuff.

Anyhow.....i still thought that this was very interesting....You have brought up important points here that makes us wonder even for the slightest minute.

Thanks for sharing...Until we meet again,
take care.....
Irina
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is a really interesting poem, albeit, a slightly different the collocation could aid the reader to take in the sense of the lines more.. Perhaps something like –


Life just is
It is neither fair nor just
Everyday that goes by
is a product of our choices

When I fall
I have no one to blame
but myself
Therefore, when I stand up
I have no one to applaud but me
The only person
that you are in charge of
is yourself

You live for you
And die for you
In the end
all that is left is you

Life is nothing
And because life is nothing
Then you have no barriers
Since you have no limits
Then you can achieve anything

You are free

The only thing
that you can be sure of
Is that you live
You breathe
You are you
No matter whom that might be

I still don’t get it myself
But that is also the beauty of life
That you are able to question it

There are no right and wrong answers
In reality there really aren’t answers
All you have is questions

Let those questions guide you

Life is made up of choices.
The human being is always changing

The human being is born without essence
He adds essence to his life by experience.
Wisdom gives him essence

There are so many things
I still don’t understand
So many things left unanswered
And every day is full of wonder
I live each day knowing it might be my last
And though I may not be the wisest
I realize that no matter what might happen
All I have is this moment

In knowing that I find happiness
Even if it is for a brief moment
That moment of happiness
Is the last hope that remains


or something like that - perhaps, you would enjoy playing around with that. On first reading I was immediately reminded of Satre's 'Being and Nothingness' and wonder if you have been reading Satre recently.

'Human beings are Being-for-itself (free beings). Everything else that exists is Being-in-itself. With Being-for-itself, existence precedes essence. With Being-in-itself, essence precedes essence'. ect.

Take care, love and peace
nessie
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
  Agreed. Quite deep. You seem to have summed everything I have been thinking about aimlessly for awhile now, I wonder how long it took you to write. I like how you say that,
"When I fall I have no one to blame but myself
Therefore when I stand up I have no one to congratulate but me
The only person that you are in charge of is yourself."

Very true, in my mind and probably yours considering you wrote it.

"Life is made up of choices.
The human being is always changing"

This one line...provoked me to think...we're constantly making decisions based on a life path that we currently see ( or don't...maybe a bit foggy) but as life moves on ( or changes) we seem to see another pathway through life. This pathway may not support the choices we made previously but it could be adapted. For some of us, we change our pathway so much...we tend to confuse ourselves...becoming a stranger to our own mind, body & soul. Others, it could be...we saw a shortcut and decided to take it...knowing it would be difficult...but if we are careful and observant enough we could make it with just a few scratches. Others don't make it through this shortcut...

All this is based on: choice. the questions we asked ourselves. the answers we got. the moments we live.

Wow...quite a reflection. Hm. I may write about this..
Keep communicating your thoughts, they get through quite nicely




| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Perpetualdreamz | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, very deep and its something we all think about. No matter what you think or how much you think you have control over life; you dont have anything. The only thing that belongs to you is you and thats all.

Now you have me wondering why I here, what is our purpose here!!

I did find a line that was a bit confusing:

"In reality there really aren’t questions
All you have is questions"

I'm not sure what you ment here, all in all good write

| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Snowball_24 | [ Reply to This ]
  Very philosophical Katrina... I've noticed that about you and your writes-- that you seek answers in this world... answers which are rarely given. And that's something that we share in common-- that drive to find out what it is that makes us as humans tick, that passion to uncover secrets around us, within us everywhere.

Spiritual happiness can be found I think. But it's an ongoing struggle to spot the beauty and revel in the moment... because that's all we can do as insignificant ants on this earth.

Peace,

Jase
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
  Hello my friend! In my opinion it didn't seem like a poem but more like a trail of thoughts in a poetic format... but if you want to talk about it on a poetic level the only problem I had was that one cliché

"The human being is born without essence
He adds essence to his life by experience.
Wisdom gives him essence..."

When you write a poem try not to have to many clichés because it ruins the flavor of the poem... lol... flavor...

For the most part I loved the poem and it really got be thinking about life. Then again, a lot of times that I read your work I think about life. Keep writing Karen and take care.
| Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Karen,

I printed this out and read it last week but I couldn't think of anything to say. I came back to it today and read it again.

I think you really have got something going here, a youthfull look at life, and you are so right 'life just is'.

I have always thought that, as you say 'Life is made up of choices' and our choices affect the world. I have always thought thst life was made up of 'Opportunities and decisions.'

You should probably not use the phrase 'The human being' so close together.

All in all I liked this piece a lot, and have read it several times. Thank you for suggesting that I read it.

Donn
| Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
  Conceptually this was certainly interesting, but linguistically, I'm sorry, I thought it was flawed. Only in that I thought it read more like the bones of an essay, or a speech, than a poem. It had resonances of Camus and, yes, Satre but I just wonder if verse is the best medium for these ideas, or perhaps it just needs a bit of tightening up. It did remind me of the dark days of the nihlism of modern youth, so it's definitely a powerful piece of writing. I hope I made some sense, and have been constructive. Obviously, this is just my opinion, and means no more than your own. Take care,
Lizzy
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Peacelizzy | [ Reply to This ]


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