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    dots Submission Name: Promisedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 19
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPromisedots
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    Your promise
    shattered like a plate
    thrown in anger
    as did my tears
    like glass
    on the floor.




    Submitted on 2004-05-12 05:08:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Amy this is wonderful! So succinct, and so utterly cuddledumplin. I often think about tears that could smash... I think its from when something so dark and grievious happens to us, the tears roll, fat and pregnant, exploding nascency on landing.
    High standard simplicity from you as usual.
    Good work, girl!
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      so short your poem is....But like I am one to speak... I liked it. Seemed clear that pain was some where in there....
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like some serious fight to me. I like how you inspire my imagination and leave me making up my own story behind this poem. great one, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      perfect minimalism, dumplin. the image of the tears shattering like glass on the floor, i could almost hear it. very good work. you haven't lost your touch at all!
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and exhaustive, good work my friend - you've got talent to such things. Fabulous. (I was wondering if you can repair broken plates... well, they would have some stains on them anyway... it's all about the life)
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      If someone uses the word minimalism one more time, I may scream....

    I prefer to think of this as a freeze frame snapshot of a moment in time, captured and presented to the reader.
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      man! i never believe any promises anymore just for the exact reasons in your poem... they always get broken. this is gorgeous. i love it! though its so very sad
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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