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    dots Submission Name: The Fringedots
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    Author: littleshuford
    ASL Info:    19/M/nc
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 140/176/52
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Fringedots
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    On the fringe
    Floating
    Out there, somewhere
    In the intricacies of the black lace nothingness.
    Always staring in from out
    Assumed denial is my proverbial wall
    Built by my friends.

    There is obligatory silence in the courtyard,
    Awkward as a gosling,
    Myself being its creator and sustainer.
    My creation is monstrously
    Dazzlingly
    Controlling me with strings and wood;
    A mariannette.

    Inside its warm and comfy,
    All gather round and tell stories
    And laugh.
    Fighting the cold outside is merely a droplet in the ocean;
    Fighting this feeling will be harder:
    This feeling that it is for
    Naught.




    Submitted on 2006-05-26 20:32:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      @#$%

    typo...

    "and that has built a wall and that no one can see that you're in denial? "

    i meant
    "and that has built a wall and that no one can see that you're NOT in denial?"
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty amazing. And I like the title - it packs so much more than merely calling it 'the edge'. Fringe has the quality of things being more messed and confused and this poem conveys being pulled in many directions - of desperation fighting with the will to go on.

    i didn't quite get the meaning of 'assumed denial'... is it that your friends assume that you're in denial? and that you let them assume you're in denial? and that has built a wall and that no one can see that you're in denial? but in reality you can see things for what it is?

    I liked your imagery of 'gosling' and 'mariannette' (marionette?) - never thought of silence that way... it's just very profound.

    again not sure of the last lines,
    "This feeling that it is for
    Naught."
    why is that? i've always found that fighting feelings is completely useless (so is dwelling over them). one needs to hold onto it for an appropriate time and then let go - because by then it ought to become part of you - either change you or make you stronger... perhaps i've interpreted this differently.

    overall, a beautiful piece.

    J
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]



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