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    dots Submission Name: Walking Awaydots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1323
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    Bytes: 275



    Description:
       I wrote this just thinking about leaving behind my classmates, those who I never knew really well, but I just knew would always be there.


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    dotsWalking Awaydots
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    Yesterday, we were so close
    Yesterday, we loved,
    and sat together, seemingly forever,
    underneath the stars above.

    Today, we drift apart,
    Today, goodbyes we say,
    then turn around, without a sound,
    and slowly walk away.




    Submitted on 2006-05-27 00:24:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, Jenna! the emotion is there, maybe you just need to be thrown into the situation to understand. This is a sad but brutally honest write. Where will all our classmates be in four years? Will we honestly keep intouch. probably not.
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the two bozos below me. This poem was very good but you need to let all of the emotions out rather than only a few.
    However,
    I loved this poem very much. I almost cried because the back of my mind feels like you want to not be my friend any more.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      this could be a really awesome poem if you added more to it!
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by maybe_tommorow | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a short yet very awesome write. Perhaps you could go back and add a bit more just ot make it a little more heartfelt. You should add a stanza or two about why you'll be leaving them behind, it'd be more meaningful. Other than that it was fantastic. I'm going through the same thing right now with all my friends. We picked different highschools so we'll most likely never see eachother again. Keep upi the awesome work and I'll keep reading.

    >:D Unwantd
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by UnwantdX_XScars | [ Reply to This ]
      strong. extremly powerful. shows emotion plain and simple. theres no twist and turns to it but thats probably what makes it so great.
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]


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