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    Author: taramarie
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 54/107/61
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsabc sexdots
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    i have the scotch.
    hooch.
    the sky was promising me rain.
    and now the birds are singing
    and conor is somewhere on the record player.
    i keep thinking i should be breaking glass
    over my skin.
    but once was lovely.
    Lovely, oh i remember him.
    The fictional character, of course.
    the one that fucked daniel.
    and daniel fucked arian
    and arian fucked...everyone.

    the plans will be simple.
    get the boy to take you where you don't care to be.
    add some shimmer to your body
    and walk slowly.
    like you have purpose.
    (you don't)
    make sure the blood is still coating
    your lips
    eyes
    and neck.
    your scent will make them hungry.

    and now it's time.
    eat their ruby red desire.
    dip your finger
    curl your spine
    and sigh.
    let them push your hair out
    of your closed eyes.

    don't you hate the girls that
    have a revolving door of pleasure
    between their thighs?

    didn't think so.

    but he has...
    but he has...
    (a gun?)
    (a knife )
    (a body full of gold?)
    plant him in the hills and watch him grow.

    Sew my stomach up.
    and dust off my veins.

    In the car
    with a boy,
    i will ride.
    He will fill me
    with nothing inside.
    We'll touch
    and tangle
    with my barbed tongue
    and his unshaved face.
    & he'll hold me and think
    what a disgrace.
    His teeth will dance over my
    hip bones,
    and my fingers will creep
    ever so slow.
    He'll whisper
    and his eyes will flutter.
    and i'll be that girl
    over and over.




    Submitted on 2006-05-27 03:22:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i loved this honestly its really different and well i usually feel something like this after having sex- real sardonic and like i've let someone take advantage of me. the line about the revolving door of pleasure was my favorite. anyway i love ur style and yea i'm out of stuff to say.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by necromance | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a unique writing style... I like how it jumps around and there's lots of semi-metaphors to keep you interested throughout the whole poem... the last stanza is my favorite. I love the part about biting hipbones and creeping fingers. I'll be adding this to my favorites and reading your other stuff too.
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
      I've never yet read something like this on elite skills. That, in one way, is a good thing. Your style is different, and I don't see any patterns really, not that i can see. and it is good to be different.

    This seemed like a kind of angry poem, like you were mad at someone. But still, it was well written and you expressed a lot of ideas.

    And in that last stanza, you seemed to accept the idea of being "that girl". I hope thats not true in real life for you. I'll be reading some of your other stuff, cuz this was pretty interesting. It's not somethin I would write, but something caught my attention.
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]
      you are pretty out there. im in a semi- poor me mode today so Im loving your work. Ive read all but one I think... You seem to resent people you have sex with or maybe just yourself for doing it. do you really or are you like me, someone who writes about all the things they dont feel? either way good job. not that someone saying good job ever changes anything but i cant say anything else.
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]



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