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    dots Submission Name: The Falldots
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    Author: Cat
    ASL Info:    17/F/Aus
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 104/87/27
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 159
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 554



    Description:
       Yeah yeah, another depressing teen angst poem. my english teacher will be proud at least. This one's for you, (we're studying teen angst, go figure) and btw its not actually for you Mrs. hehehe


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    dotsThe Falldots
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    Caught in a self-made hell,
    tortured hours in agony.
    Taste the sweet breath of freedom,
    scream as its ripped away.
    Hands bound tight,
    and gag in place
    the darkness takes control
    spiral to depths no soul should reach
    and bleed as the last light fades.
    Haunted mind, tormented thoughts
    as sanity slips away.
    Scream in pain but no-one hears
    fall silent and know all is lost.
    Resigned to the fate
    feeling hate and fear
    watching the last blood drop fall.




    Submitted on 2006-05-27 05:00:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Umm. This sort of thing really isn't my style. I am sorry. It seems as though it is well made, just really not my cup of tea so I can't comment without a bias. Sorry.
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i really really enjoyed this. it's so dark...but it really is beautiful. i think most people can relate to this, and i just absolutely loved it. i've felt this way before, and i've tried to convey that feeling through a poem or any kind of writing, but i could never do it. so good job! haha. i also really liked how the poem was structured. when you read it out loud or in your head the flow is perfect for the feel of the poem. it speeds up and slows down at just the right places, so well done. : )


    --christina.
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]



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