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    dots Submission Name: bow notdots
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    Author: feather
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 51/41/24
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 718
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       This is about having the power to take charge of your life, to change, to love.


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    dotsbow notdots
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    no longer bow and kiss
    the out-stretched hand of power
    disspell the ancient codes
    holding you tightly in their grip

    submit to your desires
    Let go the bonds that hold you
    relent of every defense
    built by others over years

    give in to your lusty self
    go find another who
    wants to leave behind the crushing past
    instead to love and laugh like you

    fill your days and years and lives
    with moments of each other
    let your lover have all of you
    take all your lover gives you

    hold gently the children who come
    from your lusty loving life
    bow them not before a ring of power
    hug them instead to your breast

    and when the winds of time
    have blown away your dust
    your children's children will have
    the love that you have left















    Submitted on 2006-05-27 08:26:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i loved this one, i totaly agree whith this, live love to the full, cherish each moment intensley,
    thanx for sharing
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      like the wording, not common. The rhyme isn't steady but that's cool. It didn't really do much as in inspiration.
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by bran_flake | [ Reply to This ]


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