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    dots Submission Name: EWWWWWWWW!!!!dots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEWWWWWWWW!!!!dots
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    Phutt!
    I spotted it
    Splatt!
    It splurted from face to face
    Ready, aim, squeeze
    Did you see it shoot!!

    Amazingly satisfying!

    An erupting volcano
    has nothing on an acne explosion

    Wild coyote would be proud!




    Submitted on 2006-05-27 09:06:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is is interesting
    This write takes your mind on a trip because it has so many different meanings
    You really captured your theme wwell
    Very Funny
    I enjoyed this
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      <small>hahaha. this was veryy funny for me. it deffinantly made me feel like a teenager, and the title is really appropriate. haha. i loved the way you described it. i had no idea what it was until the line:

    "An erupting volcano
    has nothing on an acne explosion..."

    and then everything made sense!
    it really was cute. : ) keep writing.

    --christina
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, this is pretty cute. I wish zits had taken a permanent vacation on my 20th birthday, but I still get them. It reminds me of that scene in The Young Ones where Rik squeezes his zit all over the mirror. Nice job, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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