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    dots Submission Name: slash & burndots
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    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1981
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    Description:
       pretty much self explanitory. i'm not an angry, or hating person. the only person i have ever intentionally hurt....is me.


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    slash & burn,
    my insignificant truths are not enough
    to quiet fires started long ago.
    this bloody blade and my blazing torch
    together we battle the world
    retreat to where familiar darkness rules
    and no one sees my scars

    slash & burn
    where red rivers turn to brown
    a beauty equaled by nothing
    stubborn empty promises
    find a way to kill some time
    lies and hate fill the void
    crawling in abandoned ruin

    slash & burn
    though cold and tired
    bleeding and lonely
    slash & burn

    One last time




    Submitted on 2004-05-12 07:32:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      slash & burn
    though cold and tired
    bleeding and lonely
    slash & burn

    I like those lines the best. They're sum it all up, and then there's the clenching 'one last time' that just makes you hold your breath subconsciously! It's a very beautiful poem. Though sad, it brings back memories long forgotten, I think. That may be good or bad, but in this case sadness is...emancipating?
    | Posted on 2004-07-27 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]


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