Congrats on getting 85%. When I read this I form questions in my head, such as, 'Why are they sad in the first place? What could cause such pain?' And really the poem is good in that way, it makes one think about it and ponder.
Oh, and I hope that your new line of thinking towards poetry goes well.
silly girl...u shoulda had one more stanza to make it an even number. it woulda made it flow better. that is a stupid promise to make. u will be sad again. that is a fact. ur only 14 years old. life will undoubtedly get harder and u will be depressed and probably write more depressing [censored]. use that sorrow to fuel ur poetic flare. ur depressing writes aren't bad because of what u say, u just need to practice more creativity. u have to switch it up a bit. silly girl...do i have to explain everything to u. u might as well be my damn daughter
OMG I love tis poem! I think we tend to write better poems about sad things then happy things because we all can relate more to sad things! Being that we are writing sad things in a sad poem website NEways I like it another Fav.