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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots

    Author: Elissar
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 32/28/14
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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       A poem about life... if you couldn't already tell that....

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    ...is a dance, sometimes its slow and steady, sometimes its fast and upbeat. Sometimes it makes you cry, and other times it makes you laugh out loud until your stomach hurts.

    ...is something special that we should all cherish until our dying day. It is something that can be brought into the world in months but taken out in naught but three seconds.

    ...is one of a few four letter words that we should all know, such as love, live, and hate. Although some may not like the term 'hate', it is still prevalent in this world and should not be overlooked.

    ...is an apple. We need tending to and caring for until we are grown. But at sometime one has to let go of the branch and fall into the world where anything can happen.

    ...is what created this poem. Its what surrounds us and consumes us. It flows through us like a stream through a rocky bed.

    ...is everything, everywhere, at everytime.

    Submitted on 2006-05-27 13:09:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Life is all of those things indeed and should be celebrated. There are few things in this life humans can REALLY be certain on and one of them is that we do die so gotta make the best of everything while we are here. good straight to the point write and I enjoyed the part about hate being something we should not ignore. It is a part of the human chemistry and the less it is understood and embraced the more likely a stupid violent outburst is bound to occur. Thanks for the read. I usually only comment on pieces I like or that provoke thought. Way to go.

    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this poem. It really made me double take at the thought of life. You could work on it more... in the way that adding similies and metaphors.... if not... it's okay. It was very good, and I hope to see more poems on ES like it. gREAT jOB!
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]

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