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baby Grace


Author: secret kisses
ASL Info:    22/f/uk
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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baby Grace



i had the mothers glow, which once showed on my face,
i had the feeling of true love, but it disapeared without a trace.
i shared my body with an angel, a gift from up above,
my baby showed me how i truely cared, and was something stronger than love.
my world came crashing down, the day i found out i lost you,
my heart failed and broke down, i had begun to know my world was you.
taken away so soon, this part of me,
planting a seed, but never to become a tree.
i will always love you, though i never saw your face,
you will always be in my heart, my little baby Grace,
sleep on soft clouds, and play on colourful rainbows,
i will love you and keep you near through all of my tomorrow's






Submitted on 2006-05-27 17:28:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh my God, that is soooo sad.its so sweet and jus lovely.i know the sense of loss you go through in the poem...the lines that struck me were


"planting a seed, but never to become a tree.
i will always love you, though i never saw your face"

jus brilliantly put.and so nice.....really touching piece!x
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by heidi | [ Reply to This ]
  hey baby doll, saw this tittle and had to read it, its a nice poem for baby Grace, i couldnt think of anything sweeter,
luv ya
shae x
| Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by shae_indauk | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really touching. Although it is not the most important part of a poem, the flow has a lot of impact of the reader. There is nothing comparible to the love which a mother gives to her child, and I know you made that very clear in your write. I didn;t like the idea of putting rhymes into this but it's up to you. I would like if you took a look at my latest write. Thanks

Abbas
| Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  ....this is so...moving. I really love it. It's written so wonderfully but the words mean so much more than structure or grammer. This is powerful....If this is a true personal experience I'm so sorry. It's strange how some of the most amazing poetry/prose comes from such hurtful places....

take care. <3
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi honey, this made me cry. And it takes a lot to make me cry! Obviously I don't know if this was a true personal experience but i'm guessing by the sincerity of it that it must have really happened to you. If that's the case it's probably no consolation, but you write about her really beautifully, and it's obvious you will be a fantastic mother. well done darlin, definately a fave addition. love charlie x x x
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm really sorry, cuz i think this actually happened to u. they say that parents should never have to bury their children and i guess that this is actually the case. it's sad that someone who's life barely began if it began at all had to be taken away like this. this was beautiful babe.
| Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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